【A secret model answer】IELTS task1 (table)|Edited by IELTS-samurai

 

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【A secret model answer】IELTS task1 (table)|Edited by IELTS-samurai

 

 It is a secret model answer!

I have studied in an IELTS center in a NES country from January 2019 to April 2019. During this time, I got many model answers. I will be posting edited versions of these model answers over time. The purpose so to share this information that helped me and can hopefully help others. I am also providing ways to improve these model answers.

 

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A secret model answer (table)

 

 Question

The table below summarizes information gained from surveying 912 tourists in Japan during January 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features of the information in the table, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

 A secret model answer

The table illustrates the results of a survey of 912 tourists in 2014 to find out about the types of adventure and other sports they experienced in Japan.

In adventure sports, skiing was the clear favorite for both genders. More males (190) than females (149) tried it. The numbers for hiking and diving were much lower and more than twice as many males as females took part in these activities, with 62 males doing hiking and 63 attempting diving, while only 30 females attempted either of these. Other sports showed a big difference in numbers between the males and females with more than three times the number of females (299) taking part in these activities than males (89).

Overall, the total figures for men and women were quite similar with 404 males experiencing adventure sports and other sports combined while in Japan, compared to the slightly higher figure of 508 females attempting these sports.

 

Analized by IELTS-Samurai

 

 It is OK when you write "overall..." in the last sentence.

It is OK, however, my IELTS teacher told me that you should write "Overall..." in the first paragraph because it is easy for examiners to understand the answers.

 

 We should change the contents of "Overall..." in the model answer!

We should mention the trend of the data, not in a specific data.

 

 It is important to write the introduction clearly!

My IELTS teacher told me that the examiners check the candidates’ answers two times. In the first time, they check candidates’ structures and whether data is included or not. Next, they check spelling and grammatical errors.

 

Improved model answer

 

The table illustrates the results of a survey of 912 tourists in 2014 to find out what types of adventure and other sports they experienced in Japan. Overall, the total figures for women were higher than men, and adventure sports are more popular than other sports activities for tourists.

In adventure sports, skiing was the clear favorite for both genders. More males (190) than females (149) tried it. The numbers for hiking and diving were much lower; and more than twice as many males as females took part in these activities, with 62 males doing hiking and 63 attempting diving, while only 30 females attempted either of these. Other sports showed a big difference in numbers between the males and females with more than three times the number of females (299) taking part in these activities than males (89).

 

 Additional information

・I changed “find out what ~” in the first sentence.

・I changed “Overall…” more simply and mentioned the trend that is shown the table.

・In the second paragraph and the third sentence, I added “ ; ”.

 

 

That’s all! These answers do not guarantee the band 9.0.

Thank you for reading.

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